My new Saturday coachee, S, is very good. He wrote an essay for me a week ago on the Year 12 Area Study “Imaginative Journeys”. I had made life hard for him by requiring that he wrote it as a feature article “for inclusion in a student magazine”. He did a pretty good job, but I promised to show him how he could move it even further into the required text type.
Check it out. There are two pages: his first draft, and my suggested revision. Perhaps you would like to give us a mark.
And speaking of coachees, I just heard from Ben (2005 HSC): “You may be interested to know that I did my first incision and suture on a cadaver on Friday, as well as various injections (on the cadaver of course).” Comment seems unnecessary really.